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Valor (Halo Crossover)

Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby aceofAces » Fri Apr 08, 2016 1:11 pm

Do you guys get the feeling like I messed up somewhere along the line?
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby Gunbird » Fri Apr 08, 2016 4:11 pm

I really don't see anything wrong with your story at all.

Maybe the beam weapon Vs metal shield is a bit of a stretch, but I don't see any other problems with the last chapter.

Is there anything you think is wrong with the story?
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby aceofAces » Fri Apr 08, 2016 6:18 pm

I dunno, when look back a what I've written I just see tons of problems and missed opportunities.

I feel like I've missed a lot of potential character development with OCs, and I also feel like canon characters are acting a touch OOC. A lot of decisions made by the characters seem to go too quickly for my taste, like the UNSC and Sarghress seem like they're too willing to work with each other after having only just met, like: "Oh hey suddenly we're best friends, lets go beat the shit out of some baddies!"

I guess I just feel like I could've done better. I mean I feel like I have done better.

I'm just feeling disappointed with the story and how it's going, like it's not matching up with the images I get in my head of how it should go and how it should progress.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby Gunbird » Fri Apr 08, 2016 9:35 pm

Hmmm maybe they should have a bit of conflict after the currant battle. Maybe about slavery, cannibalism and other subjects the humans will not like.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby aceofAces » Fri Apr 08, 2016 10:10 pm

I dunno man, It;s more the revios bits that are throwing doubt into my head and I doubt that simply throwing in a "slaves are bad mmkay?" speech or something is going to help. (besides it was going to come up anyway)

My hangups are more along the lines of "I could have handled this story better" and I feel like I owe it to myself and the readers to give something of some quality, which I don't feel like I'm doing.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby Gunbird » Sat Apr 09, 2016 2:10 pm

It seems fine to me.

Have you talked to Obsidian about it? Maybe he can help.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby MercenaryX21 » Fri May 13, 2016 1:48 am

Please keep going. This stuff is pretty good, and I don't want to see it end this soon.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby aceofAces » Mon Aug 08, 2016 1:29 pm

Would people be opposed to me rebooting this again? I just ask because I've got a much better first chapter going and I just want to know if people are sorta done with my antics of rebooting my shit.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby Obsidian Agent » Mon Aug 08, 2016 2:38 pm

If you feel like you've done something better, I say go for it.
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Re: Valor (Halo Crossover)

Postby Gunbird » Mon Aug 08, 2016 2:54 pm

Not at all Ace. I would like to what you redone.

What this forum is laking right now is some stores, wether there X-overs or not.
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