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Chapter 51 : Chibies

Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Basileus_Ioannis » Wed May 10, 2017 6:29 am

That Waes snow-woman is so lifelike ;) Good job, Kel

Freakin' Ash...what DOES "You look like (a Faen)" even mean? *rolleyes* Meanwhile, deep within the Sul dome:

Sul tech 1: (holding a tablet) "Hey, Salan'dara is requesting a couple more flunkies sent out to Machike." :@
Sul tech 2: "Right, pull a couple off the rack." (pushes a button on a console, whirring noises are heard) :3
Sul tech 1: "Ah, these should do nicely." (takes two inactive clones off of a rotating rack) :@/ :0J :0J
Sul tech 2: "Don't forget to jot down their serials, Salan'dara's gonna have to sign for them." :3
Sul tech 1: "Right...Faen 5376 and Faen 5377." (insert this sound here) :@ :0 :0
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Smokehammer » Wed May 10, 2017 6:58 am

This page looks like inverse Drowtales -Kern coloring Kite's lines *wee*
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Seraphiel » Wed May 10, 2017 10:36 am

name her... Machtike. :)
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby PommeGrrl » Wed May 10, 2017 5:03 pm

Whizzard wrote:Ariel: "Hey Ashwaren, could you swap my Faen for another one? Mine's a bit broken."
Faen: "Hey!"
Ashwaren: "Did you keep your receipt?"
Faen: "Wha- !?"
Ariel: "Receipt?"
Ashwaren: "Yes, without receipt I'm sorry to say the warranty is void."
Faen: "Warranty!?!"
Ariel: "Awww, shucks."
Faen: "You guys are horrible, waaah!" *runs away*
Ariel: "Faen, wait, we were only kidding!"
Ashwaren: "I was not."
Ariel: o_O

gah, I nearly died laughing. literally
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Finski » Wed May 10, 2017 5:42 pm

Chibi cutesy sky-rocketing high *heehee*
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Whizzard » Wed May 10, 2017 7:18 pm

PommeGrrl wrote:gah, I nearly died laughing. literally


It was my pleasure. :w
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby gd1 » Wed May 10, 2017 9:24 pm

Ashie used demoralize... it's super effective! Faen fainted.
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Moatl » Thu May 11, 2017 5:13 am

Can somebody fix the 4th wall, please? Octarya broke it. ;)

I'm pretty sure Octarya is already pretty aware of what's happening around her. At least since she »landed« on Quain's hand. She will always remember this, I think. :D
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby Moatl » Thu May 11, 2017 4:14 pm

Why do I hear Vaelia saying “Good Bye“ in German in the first panel?
Because “Good Bye“ literally translates to „See You again“, literally? :D
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Re: Chapter 51 : Chibies

Postby 'Lement » Fri May 12, 2017 1:10 pm

Taking a break to read the 51 twice at once (also because fox noticed the login isn't https).

If I were to describe the chapter, it would be peaceful. Vaelia, Gailen...I suppose Kau is less peaceful and dislikes the snow.

Some authors try to aim for regular punchlines, foreshadowing or cliffhangers, but here it simply flowed. Perhaps the most abrupt was the NauxKiel transition (and oh his face when Kiel started talking about babies). Tied to chapter length, admittedly.

A chapter about shipping, babymaking and babies. *waits for Faen's little sister.*

The snow is timely, too, what's with schoolkids getting to ski here on Wednesday at least.

Even Ariel's screaming troubles or the Tiny Money Salad weren't all that tense in hindsight. Sometimes, people just...disagree.

With smiles on their face and hugs or cookies given.
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